A day at the ptengland beach
The scorching sun shined down on us, as we approached the beach. We all sat down on the cold went grass to have morning tea. One moment later, we all scatered like a bunch of marballs that has just been dropped all over the pt england reserve field.
Kids played games and other kids were down at the beach making mudy sculptures. I was one of those kids making sculptures and it was fun!
Just as the day had been full of laughter! our time was up. As I dragged my feet out of the muddy wet sand, I suddenly thought of what was the best part of the day. I had just remembered that the best part of the day was.....watching the rest of my school doing karaoke!!! It was really funny!!
Laita I thought your description of the kids 'scattering like a bunch of marbles that have just been dropped' was brilliant. A perfect way to describe the chaotic mad rush. You certainly know how to make your sentences interesting. It makes the reader enjoy your writing and makes us want to read on.
ReplyDeleteI would have liked you to describe making sculptures in a bit more detail. What did you make?